Ok this is my first attempt at 'poetry' (Well, not exactly..... but technically? Yes!). So there I was sitting in class and doing what all students do - trying to listen to the teacher, and suddenly the first line of this 'poem' pops up into my head and starts pirouetting all around. So I thought, "wtf, lets create"... and the following is what got created.
((This is also an attempt at a new post when I can't think of anything else...thanks to my exams. Me being my usual lazy self don't really feel like writing something especially for the blog at the moment..Coz I'm supposed to be busy studying! And everyone is asking me to write something and not make my blog a one post thing only.))
If you sit in a dark room
Think about the past present and the future
It will seem not far away
Burn burn burn
What do you see?
An empty space
Where trees line a desolate path
Smiling longing begging...all gone
Fire and ice
Thirst and pain
Far away is the way to glory
Look on look on
Wonder what happens next
Take the lower plane
Conceal the unconcealable
Forgive the unforgivable
Forget the unforgettable
Dream the impossible.
PS - Please do not try to read between these lines ( despite the name of the blog). There are no hidden meanings, double entendres or the like. It is just words strung into lines and lines written one after the other to resemble a 'poem'. Also note that the word 'poem' is in quotes everywhere.
I doubt many people will like it. If you do, then WOW!! If you don't, then DAMN! :P
13 comments:
Wow, I liked it.
I wrote about three songs for our band in the making during the
lecture. Good idea! I'll post 'em at my blog when I'll have nothing good to pen down.
:D
Nice poem!!
I'll say what I said the first time you showed me this poem - it seems like some sexy song ke lyrics, esp the "burn burn burn" part! :D
And I loved this line:
Where trees line a desolate path
Very poetic, and notice - no quotes here.
A good attempt. I thought that your latest post will be R.Risms part 2nd but this post is good too.
Where trees line a desolate path
Smiling longing begging...all gone
this was beautiful :)
Burn burn burn
this reminds me of tht the byrds song..turn turn turn :D
Aaaah you updated.
And the poem--very nice. put some more!
@ harry: thanks. u do that!!
@ ami: yes! it's a rock song!
@bulla: wait for RRisms 2..it's on it's way.
@anshul: thanks!!
@rohit: thanks!
stick to comedy
I agree with crackfire. :D
UPDATE ALERT!
hey.... i've already read this!
i agree with ami and crackfire and jay!!
Trust me, writing here once in a while won't do you any harm.
Hi..
this is ur 1st poem....if u carry on ur pen over blank pages this way god knows what would be ur 100th one ...god knows....carry on...
Roy
Fire and ice
Thirst and pain
Amazing lines...don't know if you were trying to say anything with these but thet do convey a lot to me... nice blog yours..reached here through a string of blogs, the last one being Amiya's I guess...have to come back more often for sure...:)
Swetank
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